Feedbacks of the opening sequence ideas

After presenting two of the ideas - which are idea 1 and 3, I received feedbacks and made some changes.

IDEA 1

For the first idea, the storyline is quiet interesting especially the supernatural elements. But there are a few problems while shooting. First, the old television broadcast soundtrack might be difficult to record. Also, the time setting is at night which will be challenging for the lighting and shooting time. 

Base on these feedbacks, I made some changes for the idea. I originally envisioned three different scenes, but considering that shooting outdoors at night would be more difficult, I changed the scene where the main storyline takes place from an alley to the classroom.

The television elements are very interesting for the horror genre. So instead of making a soundtrack of the news, the television would be placed in the classrooms and would be constantly on and off. The light source of the TV is the only light in this scene. A extreme horror tension can be created with the continuous flashing of the light of the TV, and the terrifying sound effects.

Then can suddenly quiet down, and then sound good evening voice behind the protagonist. And the rest of the storyline keeps the same.

IDEA 3

In the third idea, most of them are achievable. The scene where the girl hide under the bed at the end is a typical thriller scene, and we can add special sound effects. It will create a more tense atmosphere. And also the ‘clicking’ sound of the password key instead of a lock gives a future feeling.

However, I will change the storyline from two days into one day. Because we are trying film production for the first time. A shot that expresses that this is the second day may confuse audiences if it is not edited and transitioned well. And also for a 2 or 3 minutes long opening sequence, it can’t be too complicated.

And from the feedbacks, I realised that we can’t tell the audience that the girl doesn’t have cigarettes through the screen. So I need change the way to tell audience that the girl find the strange living traces. Instead of showing that there are cigarettes in the flower plot, it can be seeing some cigarette ashes and a little spark on the flour. This can directly tell people that someone came in a while ago.